and on the rear-view...was a HOOK!

Work sure did drag today. I've been using my spare time (try 6 hours) to brush up on my screenplay writing. With my 'C' in Script Writing looming over my head, I figured it couldn't hurt. Plus if I'm going to give this next 'professional' movie a decent try, it might as well start quality from the first step.

I've been changing the ending of this piece every day this week, and I can't nail it down! Every day I think up something new, but nothing fits.

CraftyPants said to start with a good hook, and if that doesn't arouse people's interests right away, amend it or start over. That seems fair.

So here's my hook so far:


"A struggling music-writer who stole his first hit from an evil witch must revisit her forest to get more 'inspiration'."


What'dya think?? Good, bad, change? Comments, people!